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Tuesday, April 15, 2014

Mikaiah and Brodies Show not tell

1)
Emily overheard her sister Laura on the phone saying that they were going to the mall. Emily, ran into Laura’s room saying “Can I come? Can I come?”

Laura said “NO you're too young you don’t know what you’re doing.” Suddenly Emily went storming out swearing at her and slammed the door on Laura's face. She locked herself in her room and started punching holes in the wall kicking things, around and then left, to calm down.

Laura thought “Far man that girl is really spoilt and she wants to come with me?”


2)
Emily felt nervous about asking to go to the mall. Emilys heart was pounding as she went in to Laura room her legs started wobbling as she was so nervous she felt like she was going pee her pants and when Emily asked to go to the mall with Laura she said “sure i'll take you out for the day”

3)
Mary started jumping up and down because her sister Jan was taking her to the mall. Jan was waiting inside her car while Mary was looking for some fresh clothes in a bunch of dirty clothes. It took about half an hour for Mary just to get change by then Jan got very impatient with Mary. Jan started frowning and said “How long is that girl going to be?”if Mary had came out but every time Jan looked out she wasn't coming. Jan got very very angry, then started beeping the horn and started shouting at her to hurry up.


Mary was nervous to go to the mall with Jan, when she asked she said “Jan can I please come with you to the mall? As she asked Mary, Jans legs started shaking because she was so nervous. She was so nervous but when she heard a yes from Mary she just shocked with excitement started jumping up and down until she ran out of breath to be happy any more. When they got into the car she kept on saying thank you over and over again until they reached the mall.

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